1. You need to have 5 paragraphs you only have 4 and your first paragraph only has 4 sentences 2. You do not have a thesis you only have the opposite of your thesis 3. You only have 2 quotes you need 3 4. Four sentences per body paragraph analysis. This is your own analysis demonstrating how the evidence supports your thesis. 5. You are missing a conclusion 6. You have the emphasis in the 4th paragraph 7. You have no personal pronouns 8. You should keep the font the same size through the paper 9. You do not generalize 10. You need one more quote 11. You need to put some feeling into this paper, dont just throw out infomation.
1. You need to have 5 paragraphs you only have 4 and your first paragraph only has 4 sentences
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3. You only have 2 quotes you need 3
4. Four sentences per body paragraph analysis. This is your own analysis demonstrating how the evidence supports your thesis.
5. You are missing a conclusion
6. You have the emphasis in the 4th paragraph
7. You have no personal pronouns
8. You should keep the font the same size through the paper
9. You do not generalize
10. You need one more quote
11. You need to put some feeling into this paper, dont just throw out infomation.